The blog sitting opposite mine is "Contemplations."
In violation of...
Rule #2: Don't use a long quotation as the subject of a sentence.
and Rule #6: Avoid the verbs "use" and "shows."
He uses figurative language to describe a “steeper escalator of daylight, formed by the intersections of the lobby’s towering volumes of marble and glass, met by the real escalators just above the middle point.”
Rule #3: When discussing your supporting quotes, don't be vague.
The towering volumes of “marble and glass” and brushed “brushed steel side-panels” of the escalator create an elegant and ornate atmosphere.
Rule #4: When discussing the effects of a passage, avoid referring to the way it affects "the reader" or "the audience."
(I felt this would fall into the same category.)
The speaker’s careful, precise, and harmonious description...
And for the BINGO...
I enjoyed Zengarine's response the most. (:
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